The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
he given bar chart how many residents in the UK spend their money in three categories (
Food
and drinks, restaurants and hotels, and Entertainment) during 2004.
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is that
,
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food
and drinks experienced an upward trend during the period in question,
while
restaurants and
hotel
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hotels
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were the least sector
people
spend their money on in all age groups and it showed down ward trend during 2004. Regarding the provided details, in 2004, youth's
food
and hotel expenditure accounted
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5%.
then
it saw a significant increase between
people
from 31 to 45 and
this
expenditure increased to around 7%. after that,
food
and drink spending saw
a
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steady growth until it reach its peak for elders who
is
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bigger than 76 years
people
by 23%.
in
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contrast,
people
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who enjoy spending their money on entertainment there was a similar rate from the age of 30 until 45 and presented by 6%.
then
this
spen increased slightly for the age category from 40 to 60 years and it rose around one of twenty. and old
people
from 61
food
expenditure and those from 76 and more
spent
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for entertainment and
food
was equal.
Furthermore
,
people
from 61 to 75 restaurant and hotel spends were bottom of the list and accounted for less than 2%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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