The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of six types of work in employees and self-employed people by gender and job in manual and non-manual in Great Britain in 1997.

The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of six types of work in employees and self-employed people by gender and job in manual and non-manual in Great Britain in 1997.
The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of six types of
work
in employees and self-employed people by gender and job
in
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manual and non-manual in Great Britain in 1997.
Overall
, the percentage of
males
in managerial and professional
work
was considerably higher. In manual
work
, the overwhelming majority of workers were
males
by
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consisting
24
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%
while
females
rate showed 3% in crafting or similar. As mentioned above, in non-manual
job
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, most men worked in managerial and professional spheres showing 36
percent
while
approximately one-third of women worked in
this
area. In other manual works were marginally
difference
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in their proportion: for
females
27%, for
males
26%. Six
percent
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of
males
worked in clerical or related
work
in comparison to
females
which rates 31%. General labourers were least popular among
males
and
females
showing two and one
percent
. Nine
percent
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of female works in non-manual occupations,
while
this
proportion for
males
indicates 6%
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • manual labor
  • non-manual labor
  • self-employed
  • employee
  • sector
  • Great Britain
  • gender disparity
  • dynamics
  • labor market
  • prevalence
  • trend
  • occupation
  • distribution
  • 1997
  • pie chart
  • workforce
  • analysis
  • contrast
  • comparison
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