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The charts below show the percentage of the labour force by occupation in Japan and India in 1960 with projection for 2040.

The charts below show the percentage of the labour force by occupation in Japan and India in 1960 with projection for 2040.
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These pie charts illustrate the
percentage
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 of the workforce in three different
sectores
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sectors
 in 1960, with predictions for 2040.
Overall
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, the proportion of
industry
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 accounted for a significant portion of the total
workfoece
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workforce
 in
Japan
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,
whereas
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agriculture
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 was the main occupation in India.
Additionally
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, the pie chart for 2040 depicts that the
percentage
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 of
service
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 will be the highest in both countries. Focusing on the Japanese and Indian workforce in 1960, the
percentage
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 of
industry
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 made up more than half of all in
Japan
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.
Service
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 and
agriculture
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 were 25% and 20% respectively.
On the other hand
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, the majority of
percentage
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 of Indian occupation was
agriculture
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 at 70%, and
service
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 was 23%, followed by
industry
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 at 7%. Turning to the projection for 2040 in
Japan
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 and India,
service
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 will account for three fourth of the total in
Japan
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.
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Industry
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The industry
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 will decline to 23%,
wihile
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while
agriculture
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 will decrease to merely 2%. In India, the
service
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 sector will be the largest at 44%, with both
agriculture
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 and
industry
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 making up an equal proportion of 28%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, industry, japan, agriculture, service with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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