the diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purpose. summarize the information, and make comparison. write at least 150 words.

the diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purpose. summarize the information, and make comparison. write at least 150 words.
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The figures demonstrate the two processes of making
cement
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and concrete which are used in the construction field.
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, the making of
cement
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is first carried out which can be used later in producing concrete. The
cement
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is a mixture of Clay and Limestone, but concrete is made using other materials. In the making of
cement
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, the Limestone and Clay are crushed into fine powder and
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mixed together.
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mixture is
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passed through the rotating heater , heating the material and which is
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ground into its finest form to make
cement
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.
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it is packaged into bags for transportation and storage purposes. The concrete is formed in a concrete mixture, using major components like Gravel(50%), Sand(25%),
Cement
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(15%) and water(10%).
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blend majorly consists of gravel which is smaller particles of stone and the equipment used for the production is a huge rotating barrel .
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