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the shown line graph demonstrates the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries and the diagram presents the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

the shown line graph demonstrates the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries and the diagram presents the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
#line #books #four #months #village #libraries #percentage #type #time
the shown line graph demonstrates the number of
books
 that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four
village
 libraries and the diagram presents the percentage of
books
, by type, that were borrowed over
this
 time.
Overall
, the
mot
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most
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 borrowed type of
books
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book
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 is fiction, during
this
 year, Sutton Wood remained the
village
 with the largest number of borrowed
books
. From June to July the number of
books
 borrowed from Sutton Wood
village
 slightly grew from 250 to 275,
then
 extremely went down to 100, in September
percentage
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the percentage
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 sharply grew to 300. Church Mount line grew from 50 to one hundred fifty
books
, but
first
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the first
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village
 still stayed the highest. The most taken type of
books
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book
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 is fiction, it is as much as
forty three
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forty-three
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percent
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per cent
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. The
least
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last
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 one is self-help, it is ten%. The percentage of history and science
books
are
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is
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 the same, what about biography, it is nineteen
percent
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per cent
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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