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Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#employers #job #applicants’ #skills #qualifications
The contribution of
luck
 may be beneficial to a
person
's
life
,
although
 it must not be regarded as
foundamental
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fundamental
 as it seems. Personally, I do not believe that the achievement of aims is a matter of
luck
, and I will explain in the following why. It is not a hard task at all to find examples in which
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luckily
lucky
 people have been awarded incredible fortunes.
This
 is the case of
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letters
lotteries
, where
the
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life
 may change from one day to the other.
However
, one should not consider his/her future as a mere question of
luck
,
otherwise
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 the outcome of
such
 an approach might be drastic.
Luck
 should be regarded as an
auxilary
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auxiliary
 ingredient in a
person'
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person life
life
, which may or may not be present. A
person
 should construct his future
piling
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 different levels of skills and
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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,
thus
 paving the ground for his/her path. In
this
 picture,
luck
 can only bring moderate improvements, which are negligible if compared to the goals that one has reached with
efforts
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.
Furthermore
, aims reached by chance,
thus
 with the help of fortune, may have a negative impact on
the
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personal
moral
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morale
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.
This
 is the case
of
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for
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 all those professional goals that have not been deserved. Because of that, some people may be afflicted by a sense of
inedeguacy
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inadequacy
. As
result
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a result
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, people may get depressed and their fortune immediately becomes their worst
nightmere
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nightmare
. In conclusion, the future must be built with
efforts
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 and cannot rely on faith
nor
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luck
. The latter may introduce some improvements in a
person
's
life
, either economically or
profesionnaly
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professionally
professional
. Still, these are not relevant if the path has been constructed block by block, spending time and
efforts
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interpersonal dynamics
  • Adaptability
  • Teamwork
  • Networking
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Conflict resolution
  • Academic credentials
  • Technical expertise
  • Theoretical knowledge
  • Professional development
  • Career advancement
  • Specialization
  • Workplace harmony
  • Customer relations
  • Remote work
  • Digital communication
  • Job competency
  • Holistic assessment
  • Industry-specific skills
  • Work ethic
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