The bar chart below shows the percentage ot Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage ot Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of regular fitness activities among the Australian population in the year 2010.
Overall
,
women
of all
age
groups were more fitness-conscious as compared to
men
.
Whereas
, 65 and over people shared a similar ratio.
Initially
,
men
were highly active but
women
accounted physically active throughout their life.
To begin
with, at a young
age
men
were 52.8% physically active.
Although
, females were 5% less than males. After 24
years
of
age
slightly rose in females activity 48.9% to 53%
at the end
of 64
years
and the males declined to 42.3%. In 55 to 64
years
of
age
stable to 45.1%.
On the contrary
, In old
age
males and
women
in Australia witnessed equal percentages which were around 47%.
Although
, in the late Forty's physical activity was at its peak at 53.3% of
women
and at least accounted for 39.5% of
men
39 to 44
years
of
age
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical activity
  • regular
  • percentage
  • age groups
  • trend
  • participation
  • health restrictions
  • lifestyle choices
  • awareness
  • gender differences
  • societal factors
  • cultural influences
  • improve
  • participation
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