The bar chart below shows the percentage ot Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage ot Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of regular fitness activities among the Australian population in the year 2010.
Overall
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,
women
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of all
age
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groups were more fitness-conscious as compared to
men
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.
Whereas
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, 65 and over people shared a similar ratio.
Initially
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,
men
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were highly active but
women
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accounted physically active throughout their life.
To begin
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with, at a young
age
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men
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were 52.8% physically active.
Although
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, females were 5% less than males. After 24
years
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of
age
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slightly rose in females activity 48.9% to 53%
at the end
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of 64
years
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and the males declined to 42.3%. In 55 to 64
years
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of
age
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stable to 45.1%.
On the contrary
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, In old
age
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males and
women
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in Australia witnessed equal percentages which were around 47%.
Although
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, in the late Forty's physical activity was at its peak at 53.3% of
women
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and at least accounted for 39.5% of
men
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39 to 44
years
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of
age
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, age, men, years with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical activity
  • regular
  • percentage
  • age groups
  • trend
  • participation
  • health restrictions
  • lifestyle choices
  • awareness
  • gender differences
  • societal factors
  • cultural influences
  • improve
  • participation
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