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Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Requirements for having an academic qualification for applicants are debatable. Some
people
 argue that
job
 applicant's social
skills
 are more valuable than their degrees.
This
 essay will explain why having academic qualifications is far more beneficial than the
other
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. Academic qualification is one of the prerequisites when searching for a
job
. These
people
 studied hard to land their dream
job
. Education is necessary,
due to
 the fact that
this
 will mould the knowledge and understanding of a person, in the subject or profession that they are aiming for. Having the knowledge is critical in executing a satisfactory result at work. Social
skills
 alone can't bring you anywhere.
For instance
, some of them are often called "
people
 pleasers "at work. They only know how to talk but don't have the capability required to do a
job
 well. That's why companies are hiring employees based on their Educational backgrounds, qualifications and
skills
.
On the other hand
, having good social
skills
 is
also
 critical for employees to build camaraderie in the workplace. Having a good relationship with your colleagues makes for a better working environment.
In contrast
, when there is a barrier among co-workers the quality of work may be affected.
However
, let's not forget that some
people
 are considered introverts but are good at their jobs.
To conclude
, possessing a degree is critical for a smooth flow inside the company
while
 having good social
skills
 is
also
 beneficial among the employees. I would say, that it
go
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 hand in hand but ,
still
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 I believe, that, having the qualification far more outweighs the other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interpersonal dynamics
  • Adaptability
  • Teamwork
  • Networking
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Conflict resolution
  • Academic credentials
  • Technical expertise
  • Theoretical knowledge
  • Professional development
  • Career advancement
  • Specialization
  • Workplace harmony
  • Customer relations
  • Remote work
  • Digital communication
  • Job competency
  • Holistic assessment
  • Industry-specific skills
  • Work ethic
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