The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about the percentage of men and
women
in Australia between
variety
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a variety
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of
age
groups
who
had
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were
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involved in physical activities during the year 2010.
Overall
, it is clear from the bar chart that men who had done physical exercise , experienced a downward trend,
while
women
showed an upward trend throughout the period
except
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except for
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the
age
group that crossed above 65 and over. Both genders' physical
activity
had some fluctuations. Even though men
initially
had a high percentage, it became slightly equal with
women
at the end
of
period
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the period
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.
Firstly
, male physical
activity
was about 52.8% between the
age
groups
15 to 24, being higher than female
activity
levels
approximately
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4%.
Then
, it
decrease
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decreases
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to almost 42.2% between the
age
groups
25 to 34.
However
, the figure showed a gradual decrease to about 39.5% between the
age
group 35 to 44, and continued to incline steadily to the end of the period, reaching around 45% between the ages of 55 to 64 and hitting a point of 46.7% ages 65 and above.
Secondly
,
percentage
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the percentage
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of physical
activity
by females was 47.7% between the
age
groups
15 to 24. and it inclined 48.9% between the ages 25 to 34.
Moreover
, the histogram experienced a steady growth during the next three
set
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sets
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of
age
groups
. It rose 52.5% from 35 to 44,
then
increased by around 53.3%
age
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in age
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groups
ranging from 45 to 54 and remained steady for the next year.
Although
women
had undergone growth for several
age
groups
, they failed to maintain between the
age
groups
62 and over.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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