Improving trade service and manufacturing sectors are essential for the development of poor nations. For this rich nations should take more responsibility to help poor nations in these areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
It has been believed that to improve the financial condition of a nation secondary and tertiary occupations play a significant role,
subsequently
, developed parts of the world ought to assist other places. I partially agree with the statement and the same will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
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To begin
with, when rich countries could help it could provide the following benefits. Linking Words
Initially
, they could improve the flow of income in their financial market as they would have more trades and industries to run business. Linking Words
For instance
, established industries would hire workers and the trade sector would do the same, Linking Words
consequently
, dwellers could have enough money to live happily and fulfil their fundamental needs. Linking Words
Besides
, the government would receive import and export taxes from business firms, which would generate revenue for them and they could Linking Words
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these earnings to provide amenities to people.
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On the other hand
, underdeveloped nations could face some drawbacks as well because of unfair treatment. To commence with, it has been observed that developed countries frequently Linking Words
use
other resources and the host nation would face harmful impacts caused during the production process. Use synonyms
For example
, when a firm import materials from foreign and Linking Words
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a particular area for converting raw materials into finished products, Use synonyms
however
, the pollution created during the manufacturing process degrade nature`s quality and the rich part could earn more profit without impacting their place.
In conclusion, nowadays, globalisation has made it possible to establish business contracts among various nations and it is useful in the development of weaker sections as they have sources of employment and income Linking Words
such
areas need to face consequences, Linking Words
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, as they Linking Words
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it and deteriorate their environment.Use synonyms
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Task Response
The introduction does not clearly state the writer's position and lacks a clear thesis statement. The conclusion should summarize the main points and restate the writer's position.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is some attempt to use cohesive devices but there are several instances where the ideas are not logically connected. The essay would benefit from clearer topic sentences and transitions between paragraphs.