the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of British pupils in one university who can
talk
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speak
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in other languages rather than
english
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English
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over the period of 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, Spanish was the most spoken
language
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in 2000 and 2010.
while
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people who spoke two other languages were the least
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through
throughout
the period. In 2000, students who spoke English only
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represented 20% of the total pupils.
while
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spanish
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Spanish
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talking individuals were the largest
amongest
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amongst
them, with 30%. followed by French and another
language
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with 15 % for each.
those
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who spoke German and two other
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language
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formed 10% for each.
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While in
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In
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2010, Spanish
had
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gained more popularity and increased by 5%. Folks who spoke another
language
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showed
increment
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an increment
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by
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5%
also
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.
English only
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and French speakers decreased by 10% and 5 % respectively.
German speaking
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German-speaking
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and polyglot pupils remained at the same percentage of 10%.
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