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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
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The given diagrams illustrate the percentage of multiple
languages
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 used by British pupils aside from
English
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 at a particular university in the UK between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, apart from
English
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, Spanish was the most used
language
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 in both given years,
whereas
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 the proportions of usage of other
languages
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 slightly changed over the course of ten years. It can be observed that in 2000, the number of students who spoke only Spanish took up almost one-third.
Moreover
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, twenty per cent of all students were only able to speak
English
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whereas
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 other pupils could speak at least one
language
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 other than
English
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, namely French (15%), German (10%), another
language
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 (15%) and two other
languages
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 (10%). Ten years later, there were some changes in the figures as the proportion of the Spanish-only section went up to 35% and it still remained the highest figure
of
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 the chart . As for pupils who spoke French or German only, their proportions took up only one-tenth respectively .
In addition
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, there was an increase in the figure for another
language
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 and two other
languages
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 as they grew by 5% each compared to the figures in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, english, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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