The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
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THİS TABLE, WE CAN SEE SEVERAL KIND OF FAMILY.THEY WERE LIVING IN AUSTRALIA AND LIVING IN POVERTY.
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THE TYPE OF SINGLE-AGED PERSON IS GIVEN IN THİS SCHEDULE.THİS WAS 6 PERCENT,THAT WAS 54000
PERSONS
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PEOPLE WERE AGED BUT HAVE NO FAMILY.THE SECOND
ONE
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WAS AGED PEOPLE,IT INCLUDED BOTH SINGLE AND MARRIED ONES.
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WAS 4 PERCENT,SO 48000
PERSONS
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.THIRD
ONE
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WAS SINGLE
PERSONS
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HOWEVER
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DIDN’T HAVE ANY
CHILDREN
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.THE PERCENTAGE OF
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WAS 19 %, WHICH COVERED 359000
PERSONS
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.THERE WAS LOWER POVERTY AMONG THE
COUPLE
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,WHO HAD NO
CHILDREN
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.IT WAS ONLY 7 %.BUT IT’S NOT BELONG TO SOLE PARENT.ITS PERCENTAGE WAS THREE TIMES MORE THAN
COUPLE
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WITHOUT
CHILDREN
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.THE OTHER
ONE
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WAS
COUPLE
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WITH
CHILDREN
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,TYPICAL FAMILY.ITS PERCENTAGE WAS TWO TIMES MORE THAN THE TYPE OF SINGLE AGED PERSON AND THREE TIMES MORE THAN THE KIND OFBAGED
COUPLE
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.THE
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ONE
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WAS ALL HOUSEHOLDS,
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INCLUDES ALL OF THEM.ITS RATE WAS 11%.
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THE TABLE WE CAN SAY THAT PEOPLE WERE LIVING IN LESS POVERTY THAN COUPLES.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • categories
  • families
  • poverty
  • single-parent
  • childcare
  • income
  • couples
  • dependents
  • older adults
  • pensions
  • unemployed
  • financial resources
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