The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
DUE TO
THİS TABLE, WE CAN SEE SEVERAL KIND OF FAMILY.THEY WERE LIVING IN AUSTRALIA AND LIVING IN POVERTY.
FIRSTLY
THE TYPE OF SINGLE-AGED PERSON IS GIVEN IN THİS SCHEDULE.THİS WAS 6 PERCENT,THAT WAS 54000
PERSONS
.
THIS
PEOPLE WERE AGED BUT HAVE NO FAMILY.THE SECOND
ONE
WAS AGED PEOPLE,IT INCLUDED BOTH SINGLE AND MARRIED ONES.
THIS
WAS 4 PERCENT,SO 48000
PERSONS
.THIRD
ONE
WAS SINGLE
PERSONS
HOWEVER
DIDN’T HAVE ANY
CHILDREN
.THE PERCENTAGE OF
THIS
WAS 19 %, WHICH COVERED 359000
PERSONS
.THERE WAS LOWER POVERTY AMONG THE
COUPLE
,WHO HAD NO
CHILDREN
.IT WAS ONLY 7 %.BUT IT’S NOT BELONG TO SOLE PARENT.ITS PERCENTAGE WAS THREE TIMES MORE THAN
COUPLE
WITHOUT
CHILDREN
.THE OTHER
ONE
WAS
COUPLE
WITH
CHILDREN
,TYPICAL FAMILY.ITS PERCENTAGE WAS TWO TIMES MORE THAN THE TYPE OF SINGLE AGED PERSON AND THREE TIMES MORE THAN THE KIND OFBAGED
COUPLE
.THE
LAST
ONE
WAS ALL HOUSEHOLDS,
THIS
INCLUDES ALL OF THEM.ITS RATE WAS 11%.
OVERALL
THE TABLE WE CAN SAY THAT PEOPLE WERE LIVING IN LESS POVERTY THAN COUPLES.
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  • proportion
  • categories
  • families
  • poverty
  • single-parent
  • childcare
  • income
  • couples
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  • unemployed
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