The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Information about the generated electricity in Germany and
France
in the year 2009 and how much of it was renewable is presented by four pie charts.
Overall
, both countries had produced more than half a trillion kWh of power. Germany's production consists mostly of conventional thermal,
while
France
's is nuclear. Close to 60% of the electricity generated in Germnu is through conventional thermal
method
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. 23% of the
energy
is nuclear and the rest is renewable, of which nearly 40% is produced from biomass, almost 37% from wind, more than 17% is hydroelectric
energy
and everything else is from solar panels.
On the other hand
,
France
's main way of generating
energy
is from nuclear power stunning 76%.
Also
, their renewable
energy
is close to 4% more than the thermal one almost 14%,
in contrast
to the 10% other. Another difference is that the hydroelectric method is used for over 80% of the renewable
energy
in
France
. Second is wind with ten and a half per cent. Next is biomass with slightly more than 8% and the rest is solar and geothermal, which together make less than one per cent.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity generation
  • renewable sources
  • conventional thermal
  • nuclear power
  • hydroelectric power
  • biomass
  • wind energy
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • significant
  • contributor
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