The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The
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chart
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shows the comparison of energy
production
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between 1995 - 2005 it is clear from the
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chart
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that the
rates
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of the products like Coal,Gas, and Petro are the highest rate in the
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chart
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,
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the other products like nuclear and
other
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have the lowest
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.
According to
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what is shown, presented in the
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the year 1995 the
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of
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of Coal, Gas and Pero were the same rate,it was between 29.27% reaching 29.80 almost the same ,
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the other productions like nuclear and other are lower in the
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.
On the other hand
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, In 2005 the
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of Coal and gas kept on increasing until they reached 30.31%-30.93% but for the petro rate fell and reached 19.55% and the nuclear it increased to 10.10% and for the other
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increased to 9.10%.
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the
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for
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in the years between 1995-2005 in the first was less and it started to increase.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, chart, production, rates with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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