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The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in the England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in the England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of British
students
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 at one university in England who were able to speak other
languages
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 except English between the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, the most spoken language apart from English was Spanish, which dominates in both charts.
Whereas
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 in the first case the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who were not able to speak other
languages
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 where high,
while
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 in the second ,case the number of
students
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 who were not able to speak other
languages
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 slightly decreased.
In contrast
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, the number of
students
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 who spoke French has decreased,
while
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 the number of
students
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 who spoke another language has increased. As we can see, Spanish not only dominates in both charts but
also
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 increased in 2010 with 5 per
cent
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 having a total of 35 per
cent
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 of
students
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 who spoke it.
Nevertheless
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, the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who spoke French has decreased by 5 per
cent
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, as in 2010 only 10 per
cent
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 of
students
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 spoke it.
To sum up
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, the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who spoke the other two
languages
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 and German remained the same in both cases having a
percentage
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 of 10 per
cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, percentage, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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