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A glance at the table reveals the number of visitors to Ashadown Museum before and after its renovation. Additionally, two pie charts provide information about visitor satisfaction during these two periods. It is evident from the table that the number of visitors significantly increased to 92,000 after the renovation, compared to approximately 74,000 before the reconstruction. Among these groups, the rate of dissatisfied visitors saw the most significant change, dropping from 40 percent before the museum's redecoration to a remarkable decline of 15 percent after. In contrast, the rate of very satisfied visitors experienced an exponential increase, rising from 15 percent before the renovation to 35 percent after. Furthermore, the percentage of satisfied visitors also showed a rise of 10 percent after the changes to the museum, reaching approximately 40 percent. Similarly, both the groups of very dissatisfied visitors and those who did not respond showed a similar percentage of 5 percent in the year following the refurbishment of the museum.

A glance at the table reveals the number of visitors to Ashadown Museum before and after its renovation. Additionally, two pie charts provide information about visitor satisfaction during these two periods. It is evident from the table that the number of visitors significantly increased to 92,000 after the renovation, compared to approximately 74,000 before the reconstruction. Among these groups, the rate of dissatisfied visitors saw the most significant change, dropping from 40 percent before the museum's redecoration to a remarkable decline of 15 percent after. In contrast, the rate of very satisfied visitors experienced an exponential increase, rising from 15 percent before the renovation to 35 percent after. Furthermore, the percentage of satisfied visitors also showed a rise of 10 percent after the changes to the museum, reaching approximately 40 percent. Similarly, both the groups of very dissatisfied visitors and those who did not respond showed a similar percentage of 5 percent in the year following the refurbishment of the museum.
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A glance at the table reveals the number of
guests
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 to Ashdown
Gallery
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 before and after its renovation.
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, two pie charts provide information about visitor satisfaction during these two periods. It is evident from the table that the number of
guests
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 significantly increased to 92,000 after the renovation, compared to approximately 74,000 before the reconstruction. Among these groups, the rate of dissatisfied
guests
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 saw the most significant change, dropping from 40
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percent
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per cent
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 before the
gallery
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's redecoration to a remarkable decline of 15
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percent
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per cent
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 after.
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, the rate of very satisfied
guests
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 experienced an exponential increase, rising from 15
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percent
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per cent
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 before the renovation to 35
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percent
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per cent
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 after.
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, the percentage of
satisfied
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the satisfied
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guest
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guests
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also
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 showed a rise of 10
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percent
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per cent
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 after the changes to the
gallery
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, reaching approximately 40
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percent
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per cent
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.
Similarly
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, both the groups of very dissatisfied
guests
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 and those who did not respond showed a similar percentage of 5
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percent
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per cent
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 in the year following the refurbishment of the
gallery
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.

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