The Charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The Charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram illustrates the amount of each
hundreds
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of
water
in Six areas of the globe for various needs.
Overall
, the graph describes the purposes of
water
such
as industrial, Agricultural, and Domestic Use
while
also
describing the variation of use among all
continent
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.
To begin
, agriculture is one the most
water
-consuming sectors in all areas and
also
in most of the
part
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the world. In ,addition more than two-thirds of
water
needs
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for the growing of seeds except
North
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America and Europe.
For instance
, Central Asia in 88%, Africa in 84%, South East Asia in 81% and South America in 71%.
Moreover
, among remaining two are industrial dominant as like North America is about 48%
while
Europe is 53%. Correspondingly Remaining parts have a common behaviour of more use
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in comparison to
Industrial
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the Industrial
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except the Southern part of Asia.
Additionally
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all of the other four
part
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has lower economic activity and households.
To conclude
, the
uses
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water
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is not the same percentage in all areas in the world and has significant differences based on their geographic location and economic condition.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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