The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The above statement illustrates the various stages of qualification of both
men
and
women
after post-school in Australia in 1999.
Overall
, most of the
men's
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men
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have two degrees but only a few of the
women
have both.
Men
are more interested in the skilled course rather than
women
. but more or
fewer
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less
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women
and
men
are both equal in pursuing
atleast
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at least
a degree.
To begin
with, nearly all parents do not allow their girl child to continue their education. so that's why the percentage is low compared to
men
. 70% of
women
completed their undergraduate in a diploma ,
on the other
hand
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60% of people finished their bachelor's but, skilled vocational diploma, post-graduation and masters are not as great as the above two
In addition
, almost all
the
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apply
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men
are
inrested
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interested
in diploma courses compared to degrees. Other than that 60% of people
got
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have
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a master's degree and between 40 -50 % of people are qualified for
bachelor
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a bachelor
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