The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The above statement illustrates the various stages of qualification of both

men

and

women

after post-school in Australia in 1999.

Overall

, most of the

men's

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men

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have two degrees but only a few of the

women

have both.

Men

are more interested in the skilled course rather than

women

. but more or

fewer

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less

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women

and

men

are both equal in pursuing

atleast

Correct your spelling

at least

a degree.

To begin

with, nearly all parents do not allow their girl child to continue their education. so that's why the percentage is low compared to

men

. 70% of

women

completed their undergraduate in a diploma ,

on the other

hand

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,hand

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60% of people finished their bachelor's but, skilled vocational diploma, post-graduation and masters are not as great as the above two

In addition

, almost all

the

Correct article usage

apply

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men

are

inrested

Correct your spelling

interested

in diploma courses compared to degrees. Other than that 60% of people

got

Verb problem

have

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a master's degree and between 40 -50 % of people are qualified for

bachelor

Correct article usage

a bachelor

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2Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

159 words

4.50

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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