The line graph demonstrates the number of books borrowed from four village libraries in four different months in 2014, and the pie chart displays the percentage of books borrowed by type over this period.
The line graph demonstrates the number of
books
borrowed from four village libraries in four different months in 2014, and the pie chart displays the percentage of books
borrowed by type over this
period.
Overall
, West Eaton and Sutton wood
had a rise between June and September. In Capitalize word
Wood
comparison
Ryeslip had a drop . Add a comma
,comparison
Furthermore
, Church Mount had fluctuated in this
months. In the pie Correct determiner usage
these
chart
we can that the most popular Add a comma
,chart
types
of book that Fix the agreement mistake
type
borrowed
Add a missing verb
was borrowed
it
is fiction.
In comparison with Church Mount , West Eaton reached 150 in August , and he’s only in September. Ryeslip Correct pronoun usage
apply
have
dramatically fallen from 300 pieces to one hundred seventeen . Sutton Wood Change the verb form
has
in
the beginning, Add the comma(s)
,in
it
was like the others until August . After the fall, it achieved the highest results , Correct pronoun usage
apply
300
pieces in September.
43% of all Change preposition
with 300
books
is
fiction. Other 14 per cent each other are history and science.
In comparison with science and history , 19 per cent Change the verb form
are
is
biographical Correct subject-verb agreement
are
books
. And a tiny minority is selp
- help Correct your spelling
self
books
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