The line graph demonstrates the number of books borrowed from four village libraries in four different months in 2014, and the pie chart displays the percentage of books borrowed by type over this period.

The line graph demonstrates the number of books borrowed from four village libraries in four different months in 2014, and the pie chart displays the percentage of books borrowed by type over this period.
The line graph demonstrates the number of
books
borrowed from four village libraries in four different months in 2014, and the pie chart displays the percentage of
books
borrowed by type over
this
period.
Overall
, West Eaton and Sutton
wood
Capitalize word
Wood
show examples
had a rise between June and September. In
comparison
Add a comma
,comparison
show examples
Ryeslip had a drop .
Furthermore
, Church Mount had fluctuated in
this
Correct determiner usage
these
show examples
months. In the pie
chart
Add a comma
,chart
show examples
we can that the most popular
types
Fix the agreement mistake
type
show examples
of book that
borrowed
Add a missing verb
was borrowed
show examples
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
is fiction. In comparison with Church Mount , West Eaton reached 150 in August , and he’s only in September. Ryeslip
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
dramatically fallen from 300 pieces to one hundred seventeen . Sutton Wood
in
Add the comma(s)
,in
show examples
the beginning,
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
was like the others until August . After the fall, it achieved the highest results ,
300
Change preposition
with 300
show examples
pieces in September. 43% of all
books
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
fiction. Other 14 per cent each other are history and science. In comparison with science and history , 19 per cent
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
biographical
books
. And a tiny minority is
selp
Correct your spelling
self
- help
books
.
Submitted by dnm.best on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "displays" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: