The two pie chart below show some employment pattern in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie chart below show some employment pattern in Great Britain in 1992.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts reveal information about the percentage of employment among
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males
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and
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in
manual
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and non-manual categories in 1992.
Overall
, Most of
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female
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females
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in Great Britain
keen
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to
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non-manual occupations,
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males
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did manual jobs in the given year.
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, the highest percentage, which is reported for male employment
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, was for managerial and professional, in comparison with
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females
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, who did clerical and related more than other categories. In the case of
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, almost 70% of them did non-manual jobs, with 31% for clerical and related, 29% for managerial and professional and 9% for other non-manual professions respectively. The employment rate for men had a different pattern, 36% of them did managerial
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which was the highest proportion. Clerical and other non-manual jobs had
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similar percentage with 6% for
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both cases. Craft or similar had the most followers among both
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males
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and
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with 27% and 26% respectively. 24% of British
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males
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did other manual
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work
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in 1992,
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only 2% of women did these kinds of occupations.
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, general labourers had the
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ratio among British
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females
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as well as
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males
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with only 2% and 1%.
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