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The line graph beneathe proves proportion terms the changing patterns jf domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

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The chart
beneathe
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beneath
 proves proportion terms the changing patterns
jf
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of
 domestic
access
 to modern technology in homes in the UK. There
are
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 only one basic general trend: upward. The
most
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highest using is
CD
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the CD
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 player. Between 1997th and 2003 using
risedfrom
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raised from
risen from
 60%
t0
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to
 80%.
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 technique
which
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start
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 using the
last
 Internet
access
 which rocked from 10% to nearly 40% for
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a short
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 time.
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that
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how CD
player
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players
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 used the most, the
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Internet
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Access
 raised
speedily
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more speedily
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 than
CD
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the CD
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player
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players
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. The percentage for the other two devices went up by varying degrees. There was
rose
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a rose
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 gradually in
Home
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the Home
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computer
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computers
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,
however
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 Mobile phone
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flustuated
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fluctuated
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 wildly, but the trend was upward.
Percentage
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The percentage
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 of using Mobile phones doubled
,
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than
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 using Home
computer
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computers
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 in the same period. It is Noticeable that the
using
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 Internet
access
 is the lowest in
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2003 than for the other three devices.
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