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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The provided chart depicts the proportion of
tourists
 who came to England to visit 4 tourist destinations in
Brigton
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Brighton
 from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
 , the proportion of
tourists
 who visited the Pavillion and Pier increased
while
 visiting art galleries significantly lost
its
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their
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 popularity over the years.
Tourists
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Tourists'
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 attraction
for
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to
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pavilion
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the pavilion
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 saw a dramatic increase from just over 20% in 1980 to just below 50% in 1995 before experiencing a significant decline in 2000 at 35%. The numbers
then
 fluctuated between 35% to 30% until the end of the period.
The
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 significant decrease in
travelers
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travellers
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 visiting art galleries was evident. Nearly 25% of
tourists
 in 1980 rocketed to more than 35% in the next five years and experienced a sudden drop to just below 20% in 1990 before decreasing gradually to just below 10% in 2010. Numbers for visiting Pier hovered nearly at 10% until 2000 and doubled its value within the next decade at just above 20%. Despite minor fluctuations,
tourists
' participation in festivals remained relatively stable throughout the year
in
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between 25% to 30%.
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