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The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart shows
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 trend of international
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graduated
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 from 6 different provinces in Canada from 2001 to 2006.
Overall
,
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 percentage of
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graduates
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 from universities in New Brunswick province in both years
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presented, in 2006, graduated students from New Brunswick province
categorized
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 the most by 12
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. Meanwhile, Nova
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 and British Columbia almost shared
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number
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 about 11
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.
Likewise
, Manitoba, Newfoundland & Labrador
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 number somewhere in the vicinity of 7
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.
On the other hand
, Alberta and Ontario had the smallest percentage of graduated
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.
Moreover
, in 2001 New Brunswick still
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 the highest percentage of
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students
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, followed by Nova
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 and Quebec. The average number was counted by 6 % and the rest 3 countries (just had under
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5
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 who
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 from universities there.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words student, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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