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You recently hired a restaurant to host an office party at work, but there were several problems with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: Give details of the food and services you ordered Describe the problems that occurred Explain what you want the restaurant to do

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Dear sir , I am writing
this
 to give reviews about your restaurant's food and service at our office party. During the discussions regarding the office party with your
management
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 we have decided
the
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on the
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apetizers
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appetisers
 which
includes
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include
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 five items, lunch and dinner
along with
 dessert for 80 people. Drinks were
also
 there in the decided menu.
Also
, your team promised to provide servers for the party and extra cost was charged to us for
this
 service. Unfortunately, there were many items which we have not received in actual quantity . Not only
this
, servers were not enough to handle the guests because of
which
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 many employees had to come forward to serve them. I would request you to have a look
on
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at
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 the planned menu so that our company would not be overcharged for the food and the services which are
lacked
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 by your team.
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Yours
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Your
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 faithfully, Thank you
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