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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented pictures depict a breakdown of
crime
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-related data in the
UK
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 for the past year, specified by
types
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 of
crime
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 and criminals'
age
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. The line graph illustrates the correlation between
crime
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 and the
age
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 of offenders.
According to
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 the graph, the
age
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 at which people in the
UK
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 start to commit crimes is 8. There is a small increase from 0 to 50,000 people between ages 8 and 12, which dramatically rockets
afterward
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 and reaches 700,000 at the
age
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 of 16. Most of the criminals, 800,000, are 20 years old as the
crime
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 rate peaks at
this
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 time. Between 20 and 28 years old, the
crime
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 rate is falling sharply and hits the number of 200,000. From 28 straight on, the number of
crime
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-makers is decreasing steadily and stops at the level of a bit less than 100,000 by the
age
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 of 60. The pie chart gives information about the
crime
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types
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, the most popular of which is violet
crime
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 with 46%. Property and drug
types
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 are almost at the same level of popularity with 23% for the former and 22% for the latter. The least widespread kind is the public order
crime
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, which takes only 9% of
overall
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 crimes committed in the
UK
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 during the
last
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 year. In conclusion, for the
last
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 year, the law was violated mostly by young
UK
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 citizens ages 12-28, with the highest number of 20-year-old offenders: 800,000. Talking about the
crime
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types
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, the violent
crime
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 type was the most committed with 46%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, types, crime, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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