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the chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value of export in 2016

the chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value of export in 2016
The display chart provides information on the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015
as well as
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 2016. In the year 2015, in petroleum
products
Use synonyms
 it
were
Change the verb form
was
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 60, in engineered goods it was around 55, in gems and jewellery it
were
Change the verb form
was
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 nearly 45, in agricultural
products
Use synonyms
 it was more than 30 and in ,textiles it was between 20-
30
Correct word choice
and 30
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. In the year 2016, in petroleum
products
Use synonyms
 ans
also
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 in engineered goods it was more than 60, in gems and jewellery it was 40, in agricultural
products
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 it was more than 30 and in textiles it was 30. There has been a rise in petroleum
products
Use synonyms
 there are increase
by
Change preposition
of
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 3%, in engineered goods it was
8.5
Correct article usage
an 8.5
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% increase, in agriculture
products
Use synonyms
 was 0.81% and in gems and ,jewellery was 5.18%.
To conclude
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, the above data describes about 5 export items in the years 2015 and 2016. It is given in 4 billion.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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