A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice
Dear John,
I am glad to hear that you joined
in
Saint Peter's Change preposition
apply
School
. Although
you are left
the Wrong verb form
leave
school
in a short time, it's
Unnecessary verb
it
feel
much longer.
It is usual that you might feel discomfort for Correct subject-verb agreement
feels
few
days after joining a new Correct article usage
a few
school
. You should make new friends there which will help you recover from home sick
Correct your spelling
homesick
also
. Try to walk after school
with your classmates or just invite them for a coffee which will help you to bel
close Correct your spelling
be
with
them.
I heard your new Change preposition
to
school
have a good football team. As you are the best player in the last
inter
Add a hyphen
inter-school
school
match, try to join the team. Film club also
a good option for you, and try to touch with Add a missing verb
is also
student's
union office, they might lead you Correct article usage
the student's
further
.
The library is also
very useful in the school
. You should ask your tutor to obtain a library card which will help you to get special discount
from the shops Fix the agreement mistake
discounts
in
Change preposition
on
the
campus.
If you need Correct article usage
apply
to
any Change preposition
apply
further
ssupport
, just dial Correct your spelling
support
to
my mom's number after 5 in the evening.
Change preposition
apply
Warn
regards
JenniferCorrect your spelling
Warm
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea. The second paragraph attempts to cover multiple suggestions which reduces clarity.
coherence cohesion
Greeting and closing are present, but could be improved in terms of personal engagement and warmth.
task achievement
Response to the task is adequate. However, try to develop your points more fully to enhance the advice given.
task achievement
The tone is generally suitable and friendly, but try to use varied sentence structures to make the letter sound more natural.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite