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The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#graphs #show #four #categories #fruits #three #countries #were #thousand #tonnes #summarise #information #features #comparisons
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illustate
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illustrate
the
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information about the citrus fruit, which
is
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 exported by four countries
such
 as South Africa,
Maxico
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Mexico
,Egypt and the
USAin
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USA in
 2012.
units
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 are measured in
tonnes
.
Overall
,
an
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oranges and
a
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grapefruits were mostly exported by
south africa
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South Africa
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 and
turkey
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Turkey
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respecrtively
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respectively
.
However
,
others
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other
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 fruits were the lowest in terms of exportation. An analysis of data shows that, around 1000 of
tonnes
 orages
exported
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were exported
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 by South Africa, which was the highest rather than Egypt and the
USA
. In terms of exportations of lemon, Mexico
were
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was
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 comprised
of
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500
tonnes
,
where as
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whereas
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 the
USA
 and
argentina
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Argentina
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was
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were
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 200 and 100
tonnes
 respectively.
On the other hand
,
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other
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other
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others
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other
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 fruits
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were
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exported by
Maxico
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Mexico
, with 500
tonnes
.Meanwhile,merely 20
tonnnes
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tonnes
 of other fruit were exported by Egypt and the
USA
 appropriately,which was the lowest among all fruits. Grapes fruit were exported by Turkey
was
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about 400
tonnes
 and 200
tonnes
 by the
USA
, which was the lowest among all
grapesfruit
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grapefruit
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, usa with synonyms.
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