The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The illustrations present the processes and the equipment needed for
cement
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and concrete productions.
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, both processes need a
mixer
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.
Cement
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is composed of not only clay but limestone,
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the concrete needs another
ingredients
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at the specific ration. Interestingly, heat and other machinery to the
cement
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and concrete productions. Limestone and clay are the main
ingredients
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for
cement
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production. These
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are ground to powder.
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it is passed through the
mixer
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and the rotating heater. In
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stage heat is needed
while
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the heater is rotating. The processed mixture is
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made to become finished
cement
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by the grinder before being packed in the bag. In the process of concrete production the are four key
ingredients
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, which are gravel, sand,
cement
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, and water with the accurate ratio of 50 : 25 : 15 : 10 in order. These
ingredients
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are
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poured into the
mixer
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in order to to form the finished concrete. The
mixer
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spins at the coistent pace to rotate all mixtures together.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, mixer, ingredients with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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