You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing Task 1
The pie chart depicts the percentage of how working adults spend time on six activities in the
year
1958 and 2008.
Overall
, it is evident that the most
prefered
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preferred
activity is working
that
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which
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remains the
most
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apply
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favourite in both
the
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years.
However
, the least activity
prefered
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preferred
was travel to work ,playing sports or other activity of their interest and going out with friends and family. In detail, the
people
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number of people
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who
preferd
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prefer
preferred
to work was 33
percent
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per cent
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in 1958 which increased by 7
percent
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per cent
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in the
year
2008.
Similarly
, playing sports or following other
interest
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interests
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and travel to work
also
increased by 2
percent
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per cent
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and 6
percent
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per cent
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which shares
equal
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an equal
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place in the
year
2008.
Also
, people
prefering
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preferring
prefer
to relax at home was 8
percent
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per cent
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in the
year
1958 which
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reached
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to
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13
percent
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per cent
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in 2008. In terms of people who prefer activities
such
as sleeping,
going
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and going
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out with friends or families tend to decrease
with
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19
percent
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per cent
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and 32
percent
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per cent
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in the
year
1958
whereas
in 2008 it was recorded at 6
percent
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per cent
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and 25
percent
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per cent
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respectivelty
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respectively
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • summarise
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • time spent
  • work-related
  • leisure
  • personal care
  • travel
  • noticeable trends
  • over a period
  • devoted
  • significant changes
  • contrast
  • compare
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