The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
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The bar chart depicts the percentage of citizens (male and female) in the UK taking almost five portions of fruits and vegetables by different
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in the year 2006.
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, it is evident that all ages consume fruits and vegetables but the
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55 to 64 consumes the most
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the least was from 19 to 24
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.Female consumption always beats the men in every
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. In detail,the consumption of fruits and vegetables by the young ones was almost 15 per
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( male and female).
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, in different
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it got increased by 5 per
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every time till
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the age
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35 to 44.Afterwards, it was constant for the 45 to 54
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.But for the 55 to 64 years of
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it reached almost 30 per
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and 35 per
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for males and females respectively. In the
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65-74, it showed a downward trend constituting 30 per
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and almost 26 per
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for females and males respectively.
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, for the
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,75 it remained equal which was 25 per
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced diet
  • fruit and vegetable intake
  • recommendations
  • percentage
  • males
  • females
  • age group
  • consumption
  • comparison
  • analyze
  • increase
  • intake
  • statistics
  • data
  • trend
  • healthy lifestyle
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