The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
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The bar chart depicts the percentage of citizens (male and female) in the UK taking almost five portions of fruits and vegetables by different
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