The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The representation illustrates, with two pie charts, how online sales in New Zealand for topics,

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as travel, film and music, books and clothes, have changed over ten years, from 2003 and 2013. As we can see from the left pie chart, in 2003 the most rewarding retail sector was travel with thirty-six per

cent

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followed by attire and movie/music, respectively up to twenty-for and twenty-one per

cent

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Furthermore

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, even if high in value, the least sold are books with nineteen per

cent

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Moreover

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, the right diagram shows how in 2013 shopping vending has altered.

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, the transactions for travel are diminished by seven per

cent

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, in the same way, went for wardrobe selling, which decreased to sixteen per

cent

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, for motion pictures and music and for books things improved, in fact, volumes were the most sold sector in 2013. In conclusion, in New Zealand over ten years more money is spent on travelling and purchasing film and records,

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garb buyers are fewer.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

165 words

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