Write a letter to apologise on particualr job you agreed to take during summer vacation due to some unforeseen circumstances. - Explain the Situation - An apology - Express that you would be interested in the position next summer.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apologise for making mistakes and I am writing
this
letter in response to your invitation to
this
summer.
To begin
with, I would like to inform you that during
this
summer the government called me to do military service. I hope you are not upset by my mistake. I didn't expect that. So I will be very busy all season I hope to meet you next summer and I hope you will understand me. Yours faithfully, Jim Hopper
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task response
The letter lacks a clear opening statement directly addressing the job situation. Begin your letter with a specific reference to the job you agreed to take to provide immediate context.
task response
The letter should express regret clearly and directly for the inability to fulfill the job commitment. Use sentences like 'I regret to inform you' or 'I sincerely apologize for any inconvenience caused'.
coherence and cohesion
The letter's structure can be improved. Clearly separate the explanation, apology, and expression of continued interest into individual paragraphs for better coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Use transitional phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. This helps the reader follow your train of thought more easily.
coherence and cohesion
End the letter with a suitable closing that matches the formal tone, such as 'I look forward to your understanding' or 'Thank you for considering my situation'.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unforeseen circumstances
  • Regretfully
  • Sincere apology
  • Inconvenience
  • Mitigate
  • Alternative arrangements
  • Eager
  • Commitment
  • Future collaboration
  • Understanding
  • Grateful
  • Availability
  • Seasonal employment
  • Hopeful
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