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The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram demonstrates how rainwater is gathered and prepared for use as drinking
water
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 in a town in Australia and the various stages involved in making it suitable for drinking.
Overall
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,
this
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 process involves three main stages:
water
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 filtration, storage, and
treatment
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. In the first step, rainwater that falls down on the roof of a house is directed through a pipe
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 at the side of the house.
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 it runs down the drain fixed at the bottom of the house.
The next step is
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 filtering to remove impurities that contaminate
water
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 collected from homes. After completing
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 stage, the
water
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 flows to the storage tank. That filtered
water
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then
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 goes to the
treatment
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 tank. Prior to being distributed to houses, the
water
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 has been treated with chemicals.
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 chemical
treatment
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 is completed at the
treatment
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 tank. Chemicals are added in order to sterilize the
water
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.
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 of
this
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 purification method,
water
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 is ready for human consumption.
Finally
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, the processed
water
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 is supplied to the houses through pipelines for daily domestic purposes.

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