The graphs below give information about coputer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrated the
numbers
of people Fix the agreement mistake
number
own
their computers during the Wrong verb form
who owned
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year
2002 and 2010, and Fix the agreement mistake
years
also
by the different education in 2002 and Linking Words
in
2010. Generally, using the Change preposition
apply
screen
as property increased Fix the agreement mistake
screens
year
by Use synonyms
year
and Use synonyms
the
higher education own them much more than the lower.
In the Correct article usage
apply
year
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2002
it was over 50 per Add a comma
,2002
cent
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residents
Change preposition
of residents
own
their computer and the rate rose Wrong verb form
owned
about
10 per Change preposition
by about
cent
Use synonyms
in
every 2 Change preposition
apply
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year
. The rate almost reached 80 per Change to a plural noun
years
cent
of the population in 2010
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It is clear that
people own their computers Linking Words
depended
on their level of education. It is about 15 in 100 people Change the form of the verb
depending
didn’t
graduate high school Correct pronoun usage
who didn’t
own
their computers in 2002 Correct your spelling
on
while
a bit more than 40 in 100 in 2010. And Linking Words
also
noticeable Linking Words
diferently
the Correct your spelling
differently
propotion
of Correct your spelling
proportion
the
postgraduate qualifications was 2 in 3 in Correct article usage
apply
the
2002 compared with approximately 100 per Change the article
apply
cent
in 2010.Use synonyms
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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