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the chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value of export in 2016

the chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value of export in 2016
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The provided bar chart illustrates the export earnings of a particular country in different spheres from 2015 to 2016.
In addition
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, the table depicts the portion change in value of
sell
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 in 2016.
Overall
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, the biggest earnings come from the
petrolium
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petroleum
 products.
In contrast
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, the lowest value was from the textiles.
Moreover
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, the biggest
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 in the value among all the categories was made by the textiles.
According to
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 the bar chart,
the
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petroleum products brought
the
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 similar amount of money (just above 60
billion
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dollars
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) in
the
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both years and increased by 3%.
Then
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, the engineered goods accounted for about 55
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 and just above 60
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016(increased by 8,5%). The following category which is
the
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gems and jewellery
contibuted
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contributed
 approximately 40
billions
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billion
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 equally in
the
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both years(decreased by 5,18%). The remaining agricultural products and textiles accounted for equal earnings (just above 30
billions
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billion
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) in 2016.
However
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, the former brought around 30
billions
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 and grew by
the
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merely
0,81
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0.81
%,
while
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 the latter contributed only around 25
billion
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of
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dollars
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 and soared by
the
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significantly 15,24%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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