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The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The bar chart presents a comparison data between the percentages of
UK
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 and international
students
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 who achieved second class or higher degree from a
UK
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university
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 in 2009. It is quite obvious that more international
students
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 gained
degrees
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 from engineering and technology majors than local British
students
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. Now getting back to the details, local
UK
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students
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 predominated the international
students
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 in terms of completing their second class or higher
degrees
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 from that particular
university
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 except in engineering and IT faculty.
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, around 80% of
UK
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students
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 got their
degrees
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 in sociology, art history and literature
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 the percentages of international
students
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 who achieved honours from the same subjects ranged from 65-70%. More foreign
students
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 dominated in majors related to engineering and information technology and approximately 10% more foreign
students
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 passed from these two majors than the local
students
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 who got their
degrees
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 from these faculties in the same year. Interestingly, almost an equal proportion of local and international
students
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 got their degree in nursing (roughly 78%) and accountancy (exactly 60%).
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, merely 50% of international
students
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 gained their
degrees
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 in international law at
this
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university
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 against around 70% of local
students
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 which represents the largest gap between the ratio of local and international degree-holding
students
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 in
this
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university
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, students, university, degrees with synonyms.
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