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The chart below shows the percentage of males and females with higher education qualifications in five countries in 2001.

The chart below shows the percentage of males and females with higher education qualifications in five countries in 2001.
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The diagram demonstrates to us the percentage of
men
 and women with higher educational
qualification
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qualifications
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 in five countries in 2001.
Overall
, in
Switzerland
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,Switzerland
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males
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male
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 percentage is the highest among
men
around
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in
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this
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these
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 five countries,
whereas
 with the similar 45
percent
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per cent
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females
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of females
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 with
highest
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the highest
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 score occupied in Germany. In Japan among both gender education
qualification
 is the lowest with females 25 and males 30
percent
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per cent
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.
Furthermore
, in Britain women
the
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are the
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 next
in
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with
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 low educational
qualification
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qualifications
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,
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and
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however
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,however
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men
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men's
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 result is average if dating
all
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in all
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 countries with 35
percent
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per cent
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. Next is
US
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the US
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 average
men
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percentage
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percent
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percentage
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 and almost
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the same
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same
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the same
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 with
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the highest
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highest
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the highest
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 result
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at
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with
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at
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 40
percent
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per cent
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. In
conclusion
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 Switzerland and Germany are equal if account
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for humans
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humans
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humans'
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 highest educational
qualification
, since Switzerland's males and
femals
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females
female
percentage
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percentages
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 are 35 and 45 respectively, meanwhile Germany's progress
oppositely
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opposite
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, qualification, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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