The chart below shows the percentage of males and females with higher education qualifications in five countries in 2001.

The chart below shows the percentage of males and females with higher education qualifications in five countries in 2001.
The diagram demonstrates to us the percentage of
men
and women with higher educational
qualification
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qualifications
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in five countries in 2001.
Overall
, in
Switzerland
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males
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percentage is the highest among
men
around
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this
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five countries,
whereas
with the similar 45
percent
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females
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of females
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with
highest
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score occupied in Germany. In Japan among both gender education
qualification
is the lowest with females 25 and males 30
percent
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.
Furthermore
, in Britain women
the
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next
in
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with
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low educational
qualification
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qualifications
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,
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however
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men
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men's
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result is average if dating
all
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countries with 35
percent
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per cent
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. Next is
US
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the US
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average
men
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percentage
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percent
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and almost
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the same
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same
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the same
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with
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the highest
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highest
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the highest
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result
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with
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40
percent
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per cent
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. In
conclusion
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Switzerland and Germany are equal if account
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for humans
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humans
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humans'
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highest educational
qualification
, since Switzerland's males and
femals
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females
female
percentage
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percentages
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are 35 and 45 respectively, meanwhile Germany's progress
oppositely
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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