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Band 7.5

You are planning a holiday to Australia. You have been given the name and address of a hotel in the centre of Sydney and would like further information. Write a letter to the hotel. Ask about the availability of the rooms and the hotel's facilities. Find out if the hotel arranges day trips and ask them to send you a brochure. You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir/Madam,

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
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 message finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to enquire about the accommodation available at your hotel, the Hilton in Sydney. I have heard wonderful things about your establishment and would like to learn more about the accommodations and facilities you offer.
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, I am planning a trip to Sydney on December 15th with my family and would like to know the availability of rooms during that period.
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, could you please provide information on the types of rooms you have, their rates, and any special offers or packages that might be available during my stay?
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, I would like to know more about the amenities your hotel offers. Do you have on-site dining options, a fitness centre, and Wi-Fi access for guests?
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, Information on parking and concierge services would be helpful as well.
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, we are planning to see some famous tourist attractions nearby and are probably wondering if you have any facilities to provide trips? If yes, I would greatly appreciate it if you could send me a brochure or any materials showcasing your hotel and the experiences you offer. Thank you in advance for your assistance. I look forward to your response and the possibility of staying at your esteemed establishment during my holiday in Australia. Sincerely, Satya Sannihith Lingutla
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coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your letter is clear and well-organized. However, you could improve the coherence and cohesion by using more cohesive devices such as transition words and phrases.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriate and polite. Well done!
task achievement
You have effectively addressed all the requirements of the task and provided relevant information. Good job!
task achievement
Your writing tone is suitable for a formal letter, maintaining a polite and professional demeanor.
lexical resource
You have demonstrated a wide range of vocabulary and effectively used appropriate words and phrases to convey your message.
grammatical range accuracy
Your sentence structures are varied and demonstrate a good command of grammar. However, watch out for minor errors in punctuation.
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