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the chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetable per day in uk from 2001 to 2008

the chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetable per day in uk from 2001 to 2008
#percentage #people #five #portions #fruits #vegetable #uk
The pictorial presentation displays the percentage of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables
everyday
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every day
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 in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 from 2001 till 2008.
Overall
, Women have consumed the most amount of fruits and vegetables, With
Man
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Men
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at
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in
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 second and children consuming the least out of all three. The trend for all three
have
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has
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 been fluctuating with women having
a
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an
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 increase till
year
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the year
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 2006 reaching
all time
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all-time
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 high
35
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of 35
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 and
then
 decreasing in number,
on the other
hand
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hand,
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men
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men's
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consumtion
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consumption
was increasing
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increased
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 from
year
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the year
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 2001 till 2006 reaching 26.5 after which it got consistent with
minor
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a minor
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 decrease in
year
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the year
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 2008.
To conclude
,
Children
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Children's
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 consumption was low at
start
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the start
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 of the
year
 2001 after which it got a boost in
year
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the year
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 2007 reaching 26 and decreased for the first time in
year
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the year
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 2008 standing at 24
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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