the chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetable per day in uk from 2001 to 2008

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from 2001 till 2008.

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, Women have consumed the most amount of fruits and vegetables, With

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second and children consuming the least out of all three. The trend for all three

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been fluctuating with women having

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2001 till 2006 reaching 26.5 after which it got consistent with

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2008.

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consumption was low at

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2001 after which it got a boost in

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2007 reaching 26 and decreased for the first time in

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2008 standing at 24

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the chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetable per day in uk from 2001 to 2008

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In most countries, women are given maternity leave from theor jobs after birth. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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