The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of vegetables and fruits per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of vegetables and fruits per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
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The diagram demonstrates how many British people consumed a portion of 5 vegetables and fruits each day between 2001 and 2008.
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it is clear that
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while
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women
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had the most consumption of greeneries each year, the count was the least for youngsters. Focusing on the first three years, the amount of vegetables and fruit children and men had showed no difference with a portion of almost 12.5 and 27.5, respectively.
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, the same figure for
women
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rose dramatically from 22.5% to about 27% of usage on a daily basis. Moving on to 2004 to 2008, all three of the subjects
initially
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saw an increase with a following decline by the
last
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year. With Children and men's vegetable use being lower than that of
women
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's throughout the years, the former rose from around 17% to 24% and the latter saw an increase of about 6%. In terms of
women
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, their slight change was
roundly
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around
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2%.
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