The three pie charts show the production, consumption of coffee and where the profit goes around the world.
The charts depict the production country, consumption and
the
profit usage of Correct article usage
apply
coffee
around the world.
overall
, it shows that European countries consume the most coffee
compared the
others and most of the Change preposition
to the
beans
, 44% of them, are produced in South Africa. Additionally
, more than half of coffee
business profits go to delivery from its resources to
all over the world.
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Furthermore
, America also
loves coffee
, proven by 37% consumption of beans
worldwide. While
Japanese people also
drinks
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drink
coffee
, the country actually produces 18% of world's
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the world's
coffee
. Meanwhile, Indonesia contributes on
27% of producing Change preposition
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coffee
beans
and Vietnam with their 16% share.
On the other hand
, most profits from coffee
business actually Correct article usage
the coffee
goes
to delivery which is a whopping 51% of them. Almost a quarter of them Change the verb form
go
goes
to retailers and 10% of them go the the exporter. Correct subject-verb agreement
go
Finally
, the producers of coffee
beans
only receive 15 of the business profit.Submitted by hanna.rahmawati93 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, beans with synonyms.
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