The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

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Oct 17, 2023

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The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

As English becomes more widespread as a lingua franca , there is concern that the values and culture of the English-speaking world will displace native values and cultures. To what extent is this fear justified?

In many countries, more and more women have full-time jobs as men, so there is logic that men and women should share the household tasks equally. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians, or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other type of job should be highly paid?

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree ore disagree ?