The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

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leisure

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Oct 17, 2023

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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1 paragraphs

8 words

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The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

It is said tht money brings happiness. What is your opinion?

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory in high school programmes (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.