The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

The bar chart illustrates the amount of

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leisure

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The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

Due to development and rapid expansion supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than people who lived in previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs(for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children.) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that a sence of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.