The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

The bar chart illustrates the amount of

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leisure

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Oct 17, 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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