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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The data below shows the percentage of university students who were in part-time employment at five British universities between 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The line graph illustrates the proportions of part-time employed
university
 students categorised into five distinct British academic institutions from 1998 to 2008.
Overall
,
while
 the percentage of
this
 type of student climbed in terms of three from five universities,
the
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Langsdale
University
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 a downward trend. Without a doubt, working part-time during the studies became more popular during the analyzed time period. Three out of five universities, to illustrate the point, could increase the share of
this
 category.
Whereas
,
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the
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Middleridge
University
 and
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Highcastle
University
 increased their percentage steadily to 75% and 65 %, respectively,
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Finckleborough
University
 interestingly experienced a steep growth from 18 % in 2005 to over 65 % in 2008.
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,
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Langsdale
University
 could not follow the upward trend and ,
therefore
, decreased its proportion of part-time working students.
While
 ,in 1998, the percentage was outstandingly high
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 60 % compared to the other universities, despite some fluctuation from 1998 to 2002, a steady fall started in 2002 at 50 % and reached 30 % in 2008.
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