The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These diagrams illustrate the
silkworm
life
stages
and the whole process of producing clothes made of
Silk
. We can see here four certain
Stages
from egg hatching to
birth
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the birth
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of an adult
silkworm
.
Besides
, there are five
stages
to make clothes from
silk
. In the first stage, It takes 10 days to get
silkworm
larvas from the eggs. All of these larvas take mulberry leaf as their food.
Secondly
, 4-6 weeks are needed to
being made
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make
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the
silk
thread on the outer part of the body of the
silkworm
larva.
Next,
cocoon
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cocoons
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are got after 3-6 days. At the final stage, It takes 16 days to
born
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be born
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an adult
silkworm
from the
cocoon
. Silkworms lay eggs by their mouth. Later, the same process
continue
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continues
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again and again
with
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within
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a selected time frame. In the
producing
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production
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of
silk
cloth.
Firstly
, we have to select the perfect
cocoon
to boil those
into
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in
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the water. After boiling, the
cocoon
are being
Wrong verb form
is
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unwind and the length of
thread
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the thread
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is 300-500m. Later, Twisting and weaving take place. For both of the
last
two
stages
, dying is the final part and the end of the whole procedure.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words silkworm, stages, silk, cocoon with synonyms.
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