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The chart provides information on the percentage change among international students at 8 different Canadian universities between 2001 and 2006.

The chart provides information on the percentage change among international students at 8 different Canadian universities between 2001 and 2006.
The chart provides information on the
percentage
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 change among international students at 8 different Canadian
universities
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 between 2001 and 2006.
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, at each university the
percentage
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 difference increased significantly between 2001 and 2006, with some
universities
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such
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 as Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador seeing
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apply
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the
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apply
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exactly
alike
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similar
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 differences,
in addition
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 to the Ontario index
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having
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has
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having
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 nearly identical
percentage
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 contrasts. From 2001 to 2006, British Columbia had a significant difference of 5
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percent
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per cent
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, but New Brunswick
has
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had
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 almost the same difference. In 2001 the
percentage
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 of British Columbia’s students was not even 5
percent
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,
moreover
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 in
2006
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2006,
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 it
enlarged
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increased
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 by more than 10
percent
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.
Universities
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 like Nova Scotia, Quebec and Alberta do not have any noteworthy differences compared to other
universities
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,
not to mention
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 New Brunswick and British Columbia, they have various
of
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changes. Among
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this
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these
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 3
universities
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, consequence, only Nova Scotia has more than 10
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, universities, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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