You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors – agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services – to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors – agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services – to the UK economy in the twentieth century.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates the economic influence of Agriculture, Manufacturing and Business and Financial in Great Britain from 1900 to 2000.
Overall
, it is evident that the importance of the
third mentioned
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sector steadily increased during
this
time period. What is striking the most
looking
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at the data is the fact that the
contribution
of Business and Finance grew during the period of observation.
While
this
type of economy was a minor aspect with a percentage of approximately 3 % in 1900, in 2000, it reached almost 35 %
due to
a
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steady growth.
However
, the
contribution
of Agriculture and Manufacturing decreased significantly.
Whereas
, farming was a key component of the UK economy in 1900 and even extended its impact to its peak at 52 % in 1950, in the following the influence plummeted notably and
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to a marginal impact of approximately 2 % in 2000.
Accordingly
, the
contribution
of Manufacturing fell steadily and reached its lowest point in 2000 at 18 %. In conclusion,
while
the Business and Financial
sector
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profited from the economic changes during the 20th century, Manufacturing and Agriculture reduced their
contribution
.
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