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Employment Choices of UK Graduates and Postgraduates in 2008 Excluding Full-time Employment

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The two bar graphs compare the employment choices, excluding full-time employment, of
graduates
 and postgraduates after completing their
studies
 in the UK in 2008.
Overall
, a significant percentage of both
graduates
 and postgraduates opted to pursue
further
studies
.
However
, a smaller number of them chose internships. In 2008, of the approximately 67,135 bachelor's
graduates
, only 5% undertook internships or voluntary
work
. About 17,735
graduates
, which is more than a quarter, chose part-time
work
. Around 44% of these recent
graduates
 decided to continue with their
studies
,
while
 the remainder
was
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 unemployed. For postgraduates, the numbers were different, with a total of 7,230 in 2008. There was a noticeable gap between those who worked part-time and those engaged in voluntary
work
. Approximately 2,000 opted for part-time employment, 2,353 continued with postgraduate
studies
, and 345 chose voluntary
work
. Nearly a quarter were unemployed, and the rest pursued
further
studies
.
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