Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

The three-pie chart provides information about amounts of rate sodium, saturated fats and sugars in food consumption in the United States.
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, noticeably dinner is by far the most important half of the sodium
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lunch rose at two items after that decrease in sugar .
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, breakfast started to increase. In the first graph,
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the dinners are double the numbers about 43%
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, the second is lowest by 37 % at saturated fat so the third graph called added sugar a negligible amount of 23 %.
although
breakfast in sodium increased by 14% ; the saturated and sugar rose by a similar amount of 16 .
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